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Fates of Love in Mortal's hands

Love is a feeling that cannot be seen,
It's fates lie at our feet covered in dust.
When it is judged it loses it's sheen,
For mortal's vision shall always be clouded by lust.
 
 And when Love can carry Young hearts so far,
Beyond the emotion of alchemists' greed,
It leaves Olds' to die alone in the dark.
Feeling that finally find Love they must. 
 
 

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  • sassykitty
    August 14, 2008

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    Wow this is profound indeed. I loved the expression of emotions and just reading this made me feel calm and chilled. Very impressed by the figurative language and tone. Thanks for sharing, congratulations on your trophy, it was well deserved.


  • PatheticKt
    August 14, 2008

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    Wow, what a lovely write yet again; somehow moving and even if the message is clear, we still have to learn that lesson all by ourselves
    Love, can't live with 'em, can't live without 'em Glad to read this


  • charcoal
    August 14, 2008

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    "beyond the emotions of alchemists' greed" i like that line.
    wish i could write like that but i can never come up with those kind of expressions
    thanks for sharing the whole poem.


  • charcoal
    August 13, 2008
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    reading your poem gave me one of those AHA moments... it was whatever it was. leave it alone. don't dissect it.

    thank you for your poem

    and i would like to read your second verse also. add it to your poem when you get the time and do send me the link