Feeling so alive
she dips and dives
pirouettes, twirls
the waves keep
the rhythm as her
dance unfurls.
Majestic stature
elegant grace,
body bows
satin and lace.
Distant rumble
a pas de deux,
reaching out
glides through the air.
Pitter patter
crystal droplets sing,
keeping time
her heart beating -
for her soul mate
a love she can't contain
on pointed toes
she dances through the rain.
Author notes
Rain Dance by =DexterousDamsel
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt by Jasmine Rayne.
900 points, ended August 17, 2008, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Wonderful Again
The flow to this was wonderful, as was the imagery too. Lately you are producing stunning pieces of work Sugar, and your writing has become very very visual and more powerful the longer you practice your art. This piece here was just another example of your writing skills. You are very talented.
Darkest love to you
Wayne leon
xxx
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You are a gem sweetie.
appreciate you so much..thank you hon for your wonderful comment
they always spur me on.
Darkest love to you
Chelle xxx
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I like this a lot. :] Very interesting write.
"Majestic stature
elegant grace,
body bows
satin and lace."
Very nicely written. Goes beautifully with the picture. I usually don't like rhyme but your words are beautiful in this piece. ^.^
"Distant rumble
a pas de deux,
reaching out
glides through the air."
Love the use of French here. :]
"Pitter patter
crystal droplets sing,"
I love the personifying you do here. I can hear the rain fall in symphonies... :]
Beautiful write. Thanks so much for entering. :]
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Thank you for your lovely comment and the bronze.
Valued and appreciated ~sugar~ ♥
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Another wonderful piece sis
good luck, and thanks for being patient with me commenting. Keep doing what you do,
Much love,
e
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Appreciate you to the max sis
Thank you once again for commenting
Love ~sugarcookie~
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Very visual!
Appears in a diffent form than I've seen you do before. This is a rhyming poem that works in pictures.
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Appreciate you reading and commenting
Always a pleasure
Love ~sweetness~
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Beautiful and so elegant a Poem you have created here.
Love the flow and rhyme
I can visualize her within your words..
Best wishes in the contest hun
Julie
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Hi hon,
Thank you for your lovely comment
always vlued and appreciated
hope all is well with you
~sugar~
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