He watched her eyes sparkle in the dark,
staring back at his reflection in her eyes, he knew,
it was now her time to die.
All her memories will be lost in time,
like tears in the rain.
This girl was isolated,
and he yearned to see her react,
as her life was being extinguished.
On the verge of losing his opportunity,
his pale, slender hands wrapped around her throat.
Slowly he watch the light in her eyes
burn with confusion and hatred.
Until there was only a dreary emptiness,
along with the fierce beating of her heart.
Then...it stopped.
Author notes
This is my 2nd non-rhyming poem I don't think it that great but tell me what you think...
Reflection
Sparkle
Yearn
Isolated
Verge
A contest entry
- Lost in Darkness by Victoria of Aragon.
1050 points, ended August 20, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Walking into the Darkness! by vampireblood.
300 points, ended September 21, 2008, 66 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Not everything has to rhyme and it's wonderful without it most if not all of my poems don't rhyme. It's overated so don't worry you did a fantastic job.
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wow.
nice imagery.
really shows what your trying to say.
and non-rhyming poems aint bad.
you should look at mine=]
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Even though this poem doesn't rhyme, I still enjoyed it quite a lot. Personally, I don't have a preference when reading poetry, when it concerns rhyme; because even if it DOES rhyme, sometimes it can be forced.
And this is beautifully done, dear poet. It's and twisted, which I simply adore. The words you selected to use fit perfectly, so kudos to you on that.
Thank you so much for entering; my Muse is intrigued.
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