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Hailstorms

 

 

 

 

Masked mystery with lonely

eyes; the shadow's tomb

lays fog so cold.

 

Wrapping morphed faces

with scarves in ashen black;

dusty breaths inhaled

like ice water through hailstorms

in June...

 

 

Hysteria 

 

Like liquid marble

chasing tonic in cold sweats;

hidden neath the darkness

there is a mistress

armed with poison kisses.

 

Pulling arms like greedy

stings that harm with

each breath you pull;

if only you could stop

the screams from

escaping your brittle lips...

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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^^Prompt, Credit to "twisted. by darkdemention" on deviantart

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  • SilentShadow00
    August 16, 2008
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    Dangg. The emotion just sucks you in. Awesome.


  • Star Shine
    August 15, 2008

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    "liquid marble" and "brittle lips" are such great descriptive word combinations. Very dark oppressive feel to this, sinister. Well done. Thanks for the entry.


  • xCandieKissesx
    August 14, 2008

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    (:

    Hello imagery! Hahah!

    Wrapping morphed faces
    with scarves in ashen black;
    dusty breaths inhaled
    like ice water through hailstorms
    in June...


    Hysteria

    Wow! This stanza was amazing! Filled with metaphor, creativity, originality, and depth! Wonderful job and good luck!


  • Anguas-Confusion gold member
    August 13, 2008

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    owchies... that's powerful, ever so intense, the mistress with poison kisses... absolutely amazing, well done, best of luck in the contest xx