hands turned out
what once was in
referencing lost love
is like that
not that the word
was ever used
only implied
in gestures
in the dark
when night was new
to lose it
mid-sentence
midway between
beginning and end
disheartening
wonder now
if what it was
was just not
boredom
Author notes
fifty words (more or less)
prompt: " I guess I'll never know if it was love"
In a list
A contest entry
- MY FIRST CONTEST by charcoal.
600 points, ended August 13, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Great take on the prompt! Well, the way I look at it is that if you have to ask then it probably wasn't ... but you had something there for awhile that felt like it, and that must have meant something more than just a relief from the boredom. But it sounds like you're movin' on 
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another good one
Great take on the prompt... Loved the feeling of time dragging implied, with the way the stanzas were written,creating multiple layers of interest in the subject matter...Maybe it was boredom? But maybe,it's another open ended conflict with no solution...
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Great response to the prompt. Love the sparse and powerful lines you've written here.
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It's boredome for me, lol! Great write!
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thank you for a beautiful poem.
the third stanza is my favorite..hopefully if it's lost mid-sentence, midway, then it wasn't boredom at least to begin with lol
reading the last lines, i can feel the bitterness and frustration at how callous someone could be
thank you once again for entering the contest
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I like this a lot. It's very sad, but also very true. Many people do not realize how hurtful it can be to just have sex out of boredom instead of actually making love.
"hands turned out
what once was in
referencing lost love
is like that
not that the word
was ever used
only implied
in gestures
in the dark
when night was new"
I like this part a lot. Wonderfully written. Beautiful and saddening at the same time.
Good luck in the contest. :]
-Lily♥
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