A temptive & alluring glance from across the room
...turned out to be a disruptive game
[I set myself up for a fall]
too.good.to.be.true.
That’s all it ever accounted for
...this silly thing “love”;;
& when you left without goodbye
I was skeptical on whether we had that
or something else.
I guess I’ll never know.
Author notes
"I guess I'll never know if it was love"
Sorry, kind of went over 50 :] 57 to be exact. haha
A contest entry
- MY FIRST CONTEST by charcoal.
600 points, ended August 13, 2008, 8 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
pleassse tell me what you think :]
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I loved how short this was because it gets the point across but comes off just as powerful and determined as any of your longer poems
*[I set myself up for a fall]*
That I did, over and over again. But look at how much we learned!!
The picture intrigued me, I really liked that, also.
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yea this is amazing!
A temptive & alluring glance from across the room
...turned out to be a disruptive game
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i lurrrve those lines
theyre beautiful
so's the rest of the poem but that really stands out and captures your attention
goodluck in the contest <3 -
Wow this is an amazing piece I Love everything about it especially the ending to it... great write.. I'm off to read more... Good Luck with your contest...
always~Steph
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What an amazing poem you have here. I like the way you ended it. You really captured the emotional content in this one. Great job!
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"too good to be true, that's what it ever accounted for.."
well, we love, we get hurt, we learn..or do we? lol
it's so tempting to believe this time it'll be different
thank you for a beautiful poem.
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