Mirror
Laughter shatters
Echoing within me.
Seeking love? Keep hiding shadows.
Broken fences set these memories free,
Branches succumb to the soft breeze
Weeping eyes won't mend hearts,
Lost hope shows through,
Mirror.
A contest entry
- Rictameter Word Bank by piccola.
900 points, ended August 17, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I took your time, now let me have your thoughts....
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I can see the flowing of one idea into the next.
laughter shadows
echoing throught me ( I would use within me )
Mirror
laughter shadows
echoing within me
seeking love hiding in shadows ...
just an idea or two.
thank you for entering.
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thanks i agree within works better than throughout
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Beautifully described. It's unique...but each line is a different idea...not much flowing. Shadows...fences...branches...breezes...crying...5 different ideas. But I do really like each individual line, which captured my eyes definitely.
Good luck in this contest, I hope you do well! -
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its kind of supposed to be the reflection in the mirror of all that is happening. plus i had to use the word bank
lol
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