Looking... no... staring,
as if blank eyes represented passion
And you’re yammering on until my ears bleed,
so, the choice was not to hear more than the low hum
like one gets when the Wild Turkey is about to bite...
Arms wave with emotional winds;
like shreds of ragged cloth caught on a sharp edge in a hurricane.
The strength it would require for a good listen,
...beyond imagination’s imagination.
Your buzz saw attack continues,
relationship's forests fall and are consumed,
so that even a toothpick’s worth of hope can’t be found.
Finally you take a breath,
and I interject “I love you”
yea, that’s guaranteed not to work...
Author notes
5. Guaranteed To Not Work
(this piece is purely from observation of relationships I have seen through the years...and does not reflect any relationship in which I am involved)
A contest entry
- 24 Hour PIF - by Bear - by Arkbear.
500 points, ended August 13, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Thanks for commenting.
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A powerful poem with so much truth in your words for so many relationships. Lived it first hand and as an observer in friends and family. You are right when you say it affects many others beside the couple going through it. Take care.
Blessings to you and yours,
Sandy
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Ha! The "I love you" wont stop a chain saw. Glad to hear it's not your relationship.
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ME TOO
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Excellent piece, been there done that. Could feelyour pain, LOL
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3rd party pain can hurt just as much (sometimes) see edited AN
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Wow, like a riptide, it carried me along its stormy path hahaha what an adventure and the landing point did not disappoint lol Good luck in the contest
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rip is a good word here, Pat...that's what people are capable of doing to each other - its not pleasant to watch...
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I hear you, Wade, and I surely agree, I have personally experienced some of it, and no, its not a pretty sight. Whenever will people wake up and get this thing right? lol
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Those words
'I love you'
only work on those
that still believe in them.
So, sometimes they do work..
Just need the right gal.
Riftkin
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yes, it takes two to tango...
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Oh my.....and I don't have to wonder why I divorced my wife...hehe ~
God bless the patient men in marriage....
....is she still rambling?
Just kidding.....I love women........just can't live with them ~
Good luck and Bless you!
Bear ~
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1st see edited AN - somehow, my wife and I have managed 27 years together (
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but I have seen this senireo played out so many times in the lives of some of our friends...its is almost as difficult to watch and pick up the remains as it is for the people involed directly
all we need is love... da da da da da (the Beatles) -
awwww Bear... not even a Riffy like me....
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...hehe.....I still believe in miracles!
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Good, for miracles happen when one does not
look for them..
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