a wind blown leaf
caught on a long dead limb,
roots shudder
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My father passed away last weekend from lung disease and cancer after 60 years of smoking. I am told he was well respected at work and work and work. I wish him peace.
Please tell me what you think
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This little Haiku speaks volumes.
Superb writing. I am sorry for your loss and hope your grief passes with more ease than not.
~Bramble
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Sad ending...
Lovely poem... I love the simplicity of the Haiku... sometimes the greatest emotions of joy, laughter, love, sorrow, etc. are best expressed in these few words.
I'm sorry to hear of your Father's passing. Whether you were close or not, it is still emotional and painful on different levels.
My condolences!
HUG -
introspective
Losing my mobility incrimentaly / I too, sense a nudge or careless bump / wondering if I'm gonna fall down / once and for all.
(even the stars are temporary ) PEACE '
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Line 3 was a great choice in this haiku!
Made me think of Winter...
I'm sorry about your father, distance doesn't always alleviate feelings.
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Ah. This haiku works John. Seasonal -- the surprising, roots shudder as well as using nature to express emotion. Well thought out and constructed. Good for you.
I didn't count syllables but you could get rid of the "a" too.
I am sorry to hear about your father. I sense some distance in your words and yet the wishing him peace is meaningful.
Lisa
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