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perseverance


striving for more can't always win
head bowed low without pretense
a mind can't occupy empty spaces
production doesn't sometimes show

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perseverance

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  • penman gold member
    August 18, 2008
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    Excellent

    Short, but so creative. Best of luck in the contest.


  • BellaD
    August 14, 2008

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    A short and powerful piece. This is insightful and deep. I love the line,
    a mind can't occupy empty spaces
    Well done and thank you for your entry.


  • apropos
    August 13, 2008
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    fabulous as always friend!


  • Lj-
    August 13, 2008
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    I really like "doesn't sometimes" for some reason.

    Best of luck!