Although
always together
We're miles apart
In a list
A contest entry
- some examples of distance by Nicolette.
1500 points, ended September 1, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Unlike my co-judge I do dabble in short form poetry now and then - well, haiku, senryu and cinquains. I've never tried my hand at a haynaku but you make me want to give it a try. This is such a tight piece of writing and you've painted so many images in the mind in only 6 words. Well done! Thank you for this entry.
~ Nicolette
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I am not a fan of all of this Haynaku business, I find it an easy way out; however, THIS I actually like
I bow down to you for pulling it off 
This makes me realise that in come circumstances, no more needs to be said - you have sumed up some of my feelings on the subject in, whoa, SIX WORDS! This is emotional distance/detachment straight to the bone.
Thanks for sharing
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I like this, short and to the point. Even in a room full of people there is always a palatable distance.
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a good piece of poetry which flows smoothly along the course of the mind and adds form to the equation with a gentle and subtle ease. this makes me think of love - beofre the internet people used to write handwritten letters and find love, we are moving away from those times now in this instant grab and throw away age.
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