Fingers ripped to fuck
From playing the guitar
High note to low note
The emotional rollercoster
Left me to bleed
Guitar in my arms
My Vocals are screaming
Sounding the alarm
This is all for you
And I haven't slept for so long
The voices in my head
Telling me to do wrong
Psychotica reigning
Over my dreams
The hard solid face
Isn't what it seems
The fire in my eyes
Consuming my soul
Destroying the future
From Young to Old
A contest entry
- Songwriting by Apocalyptic Scarves.
600 points, ended August 22, 2008, 51 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Tell me what you think, I really do want some honest feedback
Comments
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Maybe tie in the emotional roller coaster with thee way you write your poem. Make some stanzas excited and happy and some angry and some sad.
and pick what rhyme scheme you want to use and stick with it
best of luck luck finishing, I hope to see your final product soon. -
i hella like it cant wait for it to be finished i want to read more
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