i want to make a slit into my chest...
so i can pull my heart out.
i want to hold my heart and sift through it...
so i can let the pain out.
i want to take some ink made of my own tears...
so i can just blot you out.
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i find your place and unwillingly tread...
but find it barred with the love i shed...
i can't get in and i can't get out...
I'm on both sides of the bars and still without...
if i leave you here will i linger in hope?
and never find rest, never willing to cope...
but if i gore you out these bonds will stay...
through which will anyone ever find their way?
i want to know which band-aid to use...
so i don't let this blood out.
Author notes
i think i got a lil ... crazy, but oh well
ya i guess this is about me but hey band-aids can heal everything right? (and if they don't duct tape will)
Written January 14th, 2004
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Nice, When I first read it I thought you wanted to hurt yourself, but I read more and liked it more. Very nice. -
hey this poem is really nice and meaningful great job
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Damn this was a great poem..so raw and intense...you expressed everything so well. I also like your ability to rhyme without it seeming forced..not many seem to be able to accomplish it so well. The title of this piece fits very well..some wounds just take time to heal..unfortunately..heh. Will have to read more of your work.
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Wow..This was really good. It had a lot of raw emotion and it was so honest! I can relate very well with being hurt by someone you love.You feel like the equivillence of dirt just about lol. But this was a truly inspiring write and I liked it very much! I know that not all pain is the same and its so hard to learn how do deal with things that are so different.But again this was awesome! Great write :0)
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amazing. i loved the flow of this poem and the imagery is just incredible. i completely agree with the title, bandaids can't solve everything, even though i wish they could. some pain just doesn't go away... awesome write, very well done
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Great imagery, and I love the creative way you worked band-aids in there, and tied the unique title to the poem well.
The imagery and wording are great, and the format compliments the poem.
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wow. this is so good! it really gets you thinking.
i want to take some ink made of my own tears...
so i can just blot you out.
that's my favorite line! wow, wow, wow! lol, that's all i can say...you have left me speechless (consider that a compliment because it doesn't happen too often! lol!) the rhyming on this is great as well. good flow! awesome job, keep it up!
-brae -
What a great emotional write. I loved that, its so angry and so hurt.
David -
Wow I really like this alot. It's a Bitchin' poem. (sorry i just really like the word Bitchin').. but really this is really good.
<3
Destiny -
Very interesting and though provoking. Funny thing is that all you have said is true. I know I have attempted the same thing, with my heart that is. I enjoyed it.
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It feels like my own love life is on both sides of the bars. I like that line and good expression here this is intense but nicely written good job. Healing Heart
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Hmm. That is a very cool poem. It creates a great image in my mind. I really like the line "I'm on both sides of the bars and still without" It makes an interesting picture in my mind. And the ending is great. Completely changing the poem.
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