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Left for her { Silver }


Cold hearts frozen speech,

Letters written upon dust,

finger tips etched messages,

left for her to read.

 

Tears silent,

transparent pearls,

trickle down face so pale,

left for her to grieve.

 

Empty rooms,

me and you,

over crowded in those spaces,

left for her to roam.

 

was it love after-all

Author notes

fifty words (more or less)
prompt: " I guess I'll never know if it was love"

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A contest entry

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  • jcat gold member
    August 20, 2008

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    Wonderful job Jules!!! The emotions were conveyed with all the angst of this really happening.....Beautifully written and congrats on the shiney, very deserving!!


  • penman gold member
    August 18, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Such a great creation. So very well expressed. Congrats on the silver


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    August 14, 2008

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    Beautiful...

    Less is more...
    Heartfelt, thoughtful & a little sad...
    Great take on the prompt...
    Impressive!
    Well done!!!


  • luna-midnight gold member
    August 13, 2008

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    awww, this is sad....but a wonderful write, good luck in the contest and take care,
    Stephanie ♥


  • Topaze
    August 13, 2008
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    Very well done and lovely description. My best wishes always.


  • daviscth silver member
    August 13, 2008

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    Sis, you did an outstanding job on the imagery in this piece. I see a cup headed your way for this one. Good luck.


  • Angelflower
    August 13, 2008

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    This was a really good take on the prompt.. I really like how emotional it is.. And the imagery was really heartfelt too.. Thanks much for sharing.. and best of luck!!

    Angel


  • charcoal
    August 13, 2008
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    i love the third stanza. loooove it. thank you.

  • charcoal
    August 13, 2008

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    oh stop!
    you're making me cry
    ( that's a good thing coz i love to cry)

    this one i'm going to keep and read often
    thank you for that beautiful poem


    • Reptile Lady gold member
      August 14, 2008
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      Thank you for hosting and for your comment on my poem
      and for honoring me with this silver
      x

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