I don't quite know what to say,
just that I'm going far away.
You know that I'll be in a better place,
because I'm just too tired of this useless race,
I'll try to explain why i'm going;
I'm to weak to take what life is throwing'
when I look I don't see anymore light,
there's only pain and sadness in sight,
an invisible wire is choking me,
it will be better for everyone, you'll see.
If I stay a second longer here,
I'll pull you with me and you'll see my fear.
A contest entry
- My Points - Your Decision by Rock-Junkie.
700 points, ended September 29, 2008, 17 entries
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If not for the solace of shelther from the cold abrasive winds of life, people should understand why some just cannot be in this world.
And it adds insult to injury when your pains start to hurt those around you...I can only think of one misery greater than the guilt of hurting the ones I care about.
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sad, powerful, and kinda let's the reader see that when someone's in need of help - people seem to not want to.
great job and good luck!! -
wow this is such a powerful poem.good job =]
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sad
sad poem but so true and very well written!! -
This is a great poem...The rhyming is good and it isnt forced...great write
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hey
this poem is great n i might use it one dai like im an emo n all mi friends well sum of them are trying2 get me 2 stop but they dont get its an addiction -
welcome to all poetry
Hi Dark-Spirit
This is a good poem, i love the rhyming
you have some good skills with your pen i hope you find the happiness that you seek Please keep writing, reading and commenting
Barbara
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