Smoking cigs and drinking wine.
Won't answer the phone, it's way past nine.
CD'S scattered all around me.
Wondering tomorrow who I will be.
Joni Mitchel eases my frought.
I won't feel sad, I will not.
As I look at photo albums of a younger day.
I seek for youth that did not stay.
I get up and pour another glass.
Reflecting on old days, what a gas.
I am no longer young, the years sped by.
I sing another song and try not to cry.
I turned forty and I am single.
Should I put down my glass and go mingle?
Author notes
Prompt #1 "The light at the end of the tunnel is just the light of an oncoming train." - Robert Lowel
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A contest entry
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Comments
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Great reflection of words into this poem!! Getting older is not the easiest,but its a part of life! Fantastic emotion in this!! Good job!!
*Kelsi*
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this is sad but so good. i really liked reading it. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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a very great take on the quote. lovely piece. good luck in the contest
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Aging is one of the difficult parts of life, but it's as necessery as birth. I like the thoughts you put into this poem and how it reflects a lot of people from this world.
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the theme of feeling vital and alive ... to have it in one's youth is easy but it grows much more difficult with the passing years.
thanks for expressing this.
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I think you need a space in 'feelsad.' But I really like the thought process that goes on here; we all want to be younger or we all want to be younger. Great piece.
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i love this i think this thought creeps every being who enjoyed the free spirit of being young and tender you still young at heart by reading this i enjoyed it
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Superb
A very fine write. Imagery, rythm and rhyme are just fine. Reminds me of one which I wrote: "Maple Leaves Fantasy". Here's a link: http://allpoetry.com/poem/3510428 -
What a great write! I feel the pain of looking back and reflecting on your youth! But honey you are still young! Go out and mingle and have fun! You are a strong independent woman! Go get em!
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Such an slap of pain and realization...very vivid!!! Great job!
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Ah, that age .. life begins or so they say .. brilliantly expessed Lisa
Lib x x
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there's great imagery here, you might want to tighten up your rhyming but other wise it's awesome.
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awww
im sorry that you feel this way
and yes by all means you are never tooo old to do anything
and for that matter too young
lol
hahah
age is but a number
but this was deep
thank you
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GREAT WiT!
Though I usually don't like rhyme, it fits well for this piece. I don't think it would've worked any other way. I just turned 39 so I can see the nostalgia angle. About the ending, don't fret. I'd give almost anything to be single again. At least I was most optimistic about life then.
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yes
you should go mingle and share your poetry with others -
well i decided to pick this one to comment on
and its a good write its has to be the truth, as my poems always are and yes don't give up on like your only 40 talk a walk get a good thought and go with it time to mingle
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So easy to relate to your poem; this is how time passes, alone with your thoughts, surrounded by memories. Somehow the music of then makes it all come rushing back, immediate and close.
I like the way you ended with a question, but I can't answer it! For me, the answer is to be content in yourself, doing the things you enjoy. You'll know when it's time to mingle - it will be happening.
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being almost 50, i can relate, and being single until just last year, i have had those evenings, remembering when my kids were little and i was young. Very nice flow and good write.
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don't mingle if your going to drink and drive!
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great read
feels like this could be a song... just seems rushed without pauses...kool words and thoughts
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Good job
it reminds me of a cabaret singer, its quite sad in some sense, makes you think a lil'. I like the line "Wondering tomorrow who I'll be"
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being new at this, you are doing well. May I suggest that you put a space in the 6th line between feel and sad.
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i really like this poem. good job. good luck to you in life in the future. ^^
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I can see you! :) haha
Ooh love this, even though I'm only 24 and so still young I know how it is to look back and see the time that has passed. I feel it even now. It causes a knee jerk reaction.
I like how you bring in elements of your night, making it feel like I am actually glimpsing in on you. Kinda like a peeping tom, makes me feel almost naughty.
The emotions are strongly displayed, and yet there seems to be even a bit of humor in the end. Sarcasm, or reluctance?
Thanks for sharing.
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