Edens candy

Candy blossoms blooming sweet,
towering flavoured aromas high.
Pop-sickles swell with corolla flush,
dancing with beauty from each bush.
Lollipop florets bud with blazing stars,

shining their beauty out real far.

Suckers twine with pretty petals ,their

fragrance calling the bees to their balm.

Roses sprinkle out their taste and smell,

with strawberry cup treats from Edens

garden seats.

Author notes

promt 60 words in 24 hours
8. Lolipop Gardens

A contest entry

24 Hour PIF - by Bear - by Arkbear. 500 points, ended August 13, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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Darkwell
August 13, 2008

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such a lovely flow and it makes me hungry

strawberry cup treats from Edens
garden seats.

i just love that and i loooove strawberries

Good luck in the contest
Tirrell
August 13, 2008

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A very nice flowing peice, that leaves me in a sweet and pleasant mood. Seeing in imagery leaves my thinking of both a gardens beauty and the sweet smell of a candy counter. Beautiful write.
Arkbear
August 13, 2008

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I just want you to know, the suggestions I gave are not counted against your write, as this is not a contest to critique.....only to see how well you work off a prompt

Bear ~
Arkbear
August 13, 2008
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So pretty.....but check CAPS on words.....Lolipop*...&...Suckers*

Comma after flush*

Comma after stars*

Comma after petals*

Comma after smells*

Nonetheless, very pretty.....good luck & God bless,

Bear ~
Reptile Lady
August 13, 2008

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A fantastic poem you have written here hun
Love the words and such a candy created garden.
Must say my most favorite line is

fragrance calling the bees to their balm.

Best wishes in the contest
Julie
luna-midnight
August 12, 2008
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good luck ^_^