my expiration inhales
with a day-tide orb,
each gasp taken is,
etched with sunbeams.
My breath pants in
vibrant solar-shades,
each huff I suppress,
filters out a sunburst.
Your soulful touch wraps
me with a loving glow,
of summers warmth.
A contest entry
- Semi-Quickie- Prompts; 15 entries by perfectsunset.
450 points, ended September 3, 2008, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow; this was so so beautiful. You painted me a masterpiece with your words! Excellent metaphors & stunning imagery-- such a treasure to read!
Best of luck & thank you for entering
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I loved the feel of this! It read and soft and wonderful as the story it told. This was an absolute pleasure to read!
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Oh wow! Beautiful! Just how summer should be (don't know what happened to it this year
) 'Etched in sunbeams' and 'solar shades' are just two of the awesome phrases in this one. Short but deeply gorgeous hunni. The background goes really well with it to, very nice touch 
Brilliantly penned, good luck in your contest 
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Beautiful hun
Love the summer, and you have painted it so well
Shame our August has been so awful !!!
Your soulful touch wraps
me with a warming glow,..
Best wishes in the contest
Julie xx
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