Weeping
From the shadows
of memories echo
lay branches shattered and broken
a hiding soul seeking loving breezes'
Fences keeping heart from laughing.
Desperate pains mirror
trying mended
weeping
Author notes
rictameter
Now for the word bank: (you may use another form of the word)
Mirror
shadow
echo
memory
shatter
breezes
fences
loving
branches
weeping
keeping
trying
broken
mended
seeking
laughing
hiding
A contest entry
- Rictameter Word Bank by piccola.
900 points, ended August 17, 2008, 16 entries
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great for a first try! I think line 7 has 7 syllables and it should be 6 ... count and maybe I'm wrong. The shape is off for some reason ... sometimes although the syllable count is right, the letters in a word are too many or too few and it takes away from the form. Therein lies the challenge and the fun.
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Thank you for the detail. You where right Line 7 was off by one syllable. I had to edit if that is allowed. Thanks again for the assist.
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Wow, you used all the words..I tried my best to, but failed. I'm impressed at your first attempt at this, it's more difficult than one thinks huh? hehe I'm glad I talked you into entering..wasn't it fun!!
Best of luck my friend!
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This was all your fault. Once hooked I had to finish it....LOL
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But wasn't it fun!!!
hehe
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Great job!
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Thank you for reading and commenting. Think I got a few extra grey hairs on this one. This was my first rictameter. LOL
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