Summer.
Breezes echo
With shattered memories,
Restlessly hiding in shadows.
Wishes weeping, wondering what went wrong.
Laughing at love, who's now long gone.
While seeking winter's warmth,
Kept heartaches thawed.
Summer.
Author notes
Word bank rictameter
breezes, echo, shattered, memories, hiding, shadows, weeping, laughing, love, seeking, kept
Rictameter:
Starting your first line with a two syllable word,
you then consecutively increase the number of syllables per line by two.
i.e.:
2, 4, 6, 8, 10
Then down again,
8, 6, 4, 2
Making the final line the same two syllable word you began with.
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A contest entry
- Seasons... [prewrites permitted] =] by sora..
600 points, ended September 20, 2008, 59 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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brrrr!
this made me quite chilly.
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"Kept heartaches thawed."
beautiful.
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Something doesn't look right although the syllable count is fine. Maybe because it's double spaced the form is off. Could you try single spacing it and center align so I can see it properly? thank you
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Sure!
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awww. this one is good... in that sad way...
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Kept heataches thawed.
such a beautiful line...beautiful imagery!Love teh read..All the best!
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Such a cool form for words that breath a bit of winter chill. I liked this. Very nice. ~Bramble
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First Class
This should be an easy win. I like the structure form, and your word choice .
Joe
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