echo
of night's stillness
stirs memory's breezes,
hiding in forgotten branches
fenced deep inside shadows of yesterday,
broken, weeping loss of your touch
seeking to turn back time,
mending sweet loves
echo
Author notes
Rictameter Word Bank
Words Used--echo,memory(s),breezes,hiding,branches,fence(d),
shadows,broken,weeping,seeking,mending
A contest entry
- Rictameter Word Bank by piccola.
900 points, ended August 17, 2008, 16 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Excellently done Rictameter, the form looks wonderful and use of the word bank is splendid. Good job...Scott
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Thank you so much for your kind comment. I appreciate it. I'm new to this form, but it's one I really enjoy.
Linda
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excellent
what a great creation. And so deserving of the bronze. Congratulations.
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Thanks bro
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excellent~
I have never done a rictameter yet
You have penned this excellent
The imagery is wonderful
Best of luck in the contest
I have had chemo today got to lay down not feeling well at all
Hugs
Your sis
Susan~~~
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Thank you sweetness and I hope you feel better soon.
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Nicely done. I think yours is more the style of a true rictameter than mine. Great job. Best of luck in the contest.
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Thank you Chuckster..I've enjoyed trying out this new form..practice makes perfect huh?
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This is beautiful The rict itself is great and there is also nice presentation. The rict takes great form and you used the word bank well. thank you for entering
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Thank you for both your kind comment and for bronze. It was a fun contest.
Linda
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Very well done and I like the pic too. Best to you in contest.
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Thanks Rick. That's kind of you YOUNG MAN LOL (couldn't resist that one)
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Sis,
I looked at this contest, and you've got to be kidding!" But you pulled it off wonderfully!! I love this one!
"broken, weeping loss of your touch
seeking to turn back time,
mending sweet loves
echo"
Then again, it does sound like something I would say I have nooooooo idea why it should surprise me that you have written another that ties so well into my feelings, my heart...
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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I appreciate the nice comment Sis, thank you! I found a new form to play with
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WOW beautifully done sis!! How you managed to do that short form with all those wordbank words and make it so beautiful I'll never know!! I'm impressed!!
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Thank you dear, it took me alllllll day and then some LOL I'm glad you liked it..sure was a challenge, but one I enjoyed doing.
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One note..
Traditionally this poem would be titled echo.
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I first had that as the title, then wasn't sure..I'll change it back..thanks for the heads up bro..I do appreciate the help!
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This is a wonderful rict, shows no signs of someone who might have had difficulty with the form, and the poem is beautiful!
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I'm touched by your kindness, thank you so much.
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Beautifully crafted Rict', my lovely sister.
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Are you sure? I love this form, but find it very challenging Thank you so much my dear sweet kind brother! You encourage me hehe
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I liked "fenced deep inside shadows of yesterday"
I would not have known this to be a word bank poem had it not been stated. That is a good thing. Very nice.
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Thank you so much for the nice comment..I am a newbie to this form..after submitting, I'm thinking line 6 is too long? Though I'm still learning..so I'm not really sure.
Your kind comment is greatly appreciated..thank you again.
Linda
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