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Don't Know Who I Am Without You

I can't see who I am without you.
I can't even see where I'm going to.
All the rules have been erased,
And the rules of time and space,
Are gone forever and maybe more.
The stars and all their galore,
Have disappeared into the night,
Leaving so many in their fright.
The terror can have no real end,
Because we all will go and pretend,
That everything is going to be okay,
And you will come to me and stay,
Till the end.

Author notes

I did this in a freewrite, and decided to use it for a poem. I don't know if it's any good though.

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  • Just. Aaron.
    August 14, 2008
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    Very nice sweet and emotional
    A great write


  • Yorkshire Rose
    August 13, 2008
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    its a good poem, brill. ryhme and unique lines


  • Redeemed15
    August 13, 2008
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    Nice rhyme, Good style. Fav lines:

    I can't see who I am without you

    Because we all will go and pretend,
    That everything is going to be okay,

    Great poem. Keep writing


  • Angel Of Regrets
    August 12, 2008
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    good

    I thought it was was pretty good overall. Keep up the good work