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Whitewashed

I rummage through files
Wishing I'd bothered to arrange alphabetically
Searching with the knowledge
'Twas thrown into the trash bin.

Black fingerprints mark the whitewashed door
Carvings of hearts
And "Suzie loves Bobby"
Decorate the flaking walls.

The sign states our name--
Or, it did, before the dust
Decided to make its appearance
Cloaking stained metal
That reads: "Mental Department."

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Prompt: Mentally Disorganized

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  • Arkbear gold member
    August 13, 2008
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    Excellent job on editing out those extra lines.....you kept exactly what makes this write powerful ~

     

    Lots of Poets went with this Prompt, but this is the best in my honest opinion ~

     

    Good luck!

     

    Bear ~

  • Arkbear gold member
    August 13, 2008

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    Great write.....but...

     

                             ...88 words...ouch!

     

    Thank you for taking the time to enter,

     

    God bless,

     

    Bear ~