Poison drips from beauty's lips
Killing all her lovers
That get trapped in her embrace
Never ending nightmares
She kills them
By the full moons light
Blind eyes staring
In Beauty's angel face
Luring them to a shallow grave
With honey coated venom
She'll skin you with her lies
Ripping out your heart with satan's lullabies
Deadly little temptress
Devil's brutal queen
Black Widow's blind eyes
Down to her layer she'll lead you
To a room of twisted delights
Down there she'll tease you
She'll take her pleasure from you
Drawling you ever near
But you deaths upon you
For she'll cut your throat
In the throws of passion
With a poisoned knife
This poisoned little sleeping beauty
Author notes
I picked 8. This was a very fun contest 
A contest entry
- More Grim than the Brothers Grimm. by Karayan.
350 points, ended September 3, 2008, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrites welcome.... by Luckintheshadows.
500 points, ended September 10, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Very good
Nice and creepy.
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Wonderful! This is totally twisted and absolutely fantastic...I especially love: "She'll skin you with her lies
Ripping out your heart with satan's lullabies" <---excellent!!! The imagery you create here is positively marvelous. There are a couple of more technical things I'd like to point out:
>"Down to her layer she'll lead you" I think 'layer' should be 'lair'?
>"Drawling you ever near" I think 'drawling' should be 'drawing'?
Just thoughts, my humble opinion if you will...this poem is still brilliant! Thank you for sharing, and taking the time to enter my contest,
Luck.
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OOOh Creepy !
I would hate to bump into this vixen. Very vivid and scarey/ Well done.
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I love this!
The description was so vivid, so sharp.
Very nice write, Jane.
Fave lines:
Never ending nightmares
She kills them
By the full moons light
Blind eyes staring
In Beauty's angel face
Luring them to a shallow grave
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congrats on making the finalists list. This is a very unique perception on the old sleeping beauty story, kind of like a Black Widow, eh? I enjoyed reading this piece. Thank you for entering.
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