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My own Personal Manson

Sadistically tone of voice you had
longing touches upon your body

Hair so elegantly bound

Slim sightly disobedient body and mind you had

Trust we had between each other

Sleepless nights we talked on the phone

from dusk till dawn

ashes fell from my cigarettes as i listen to you speak into the phone

Seductionally whispers you had

Making me only fall for you over and over again

as each second passed by

 

 

I once thought this about you

until you led me into your trap

of deceptional love

 

I dont think they understand, why I love at your command,
from the words you speak so deep

 our bodies pleaded to have each other at once
I love you, your perfect, a manefestaion of my dreams.
You make my body feel, about a million different things.

I fell for you not once but twice

and you betrayed me

Once calling me your Goddess

as i called you my god

 

Lips so soft and pefectally smoothe

No flaws within you

Body like rose petals

as i swayed my way through your feilds

 

Your scent...

so unforgetable

sometimes i could just taste you

 

I had writters block as i wrote this...*sigh* ...i wish this perosn would leave my mind

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  • Aj264
    August 16, 2008

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    perfection is not worth craving sometimes

    this poem is a lot more materialistic than i expected it to be...it deals with the outward worldly things that happen when you feel something and it sort of creates a vacuum when it comes to creating that abstract atmosphere of feelings. All of the physical things you mention you can't forget about the person you fell in "deceptional love" with, is only a measure of the grip an attraction had over you and your mind..it, to me, hardly touches upon how much your heart has been touched in the process, even if all those were to be taken to be a symbolic of how you feel, the "ashes falling" and "the seductional whispers", and "your scent", they might create a sense of the longing you might be going through but not exactly how you feel..
    Like you said you wish, this person would leave your mind ,it doesn't show exactly, even though it tries to, what is holding you back, what makes you feel perfect and what is perfect for you..perfection is not worth craving for sometimes


  • Boxingboy
    August 12, 2008

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    then make it leave you mind

    he have the power to just paintblack over him so you can not see him

    man this is awsome sis really a great and fantastic vent hope your okay