You used to follow me around when you were only four
I told you to go away and not bother me anymore
But then as we got older you became my first girl friend
And we were fascinated by the whispering of the wind
We dated all through high school and were never far apart
I gave to you a very special place within my heart
You told me if we loved each other, we could always send
A message to each other on the whispering of the wind
When I left for college to a place very far away
We wrote each other love letters on each and every day
I told you that I loved you and I would until the end
And sent you all my kisses on the whispering of the wind
As time went by your letters didn’t come as frequently
And I could tell that you were falling out of love with me
Soon I heard you fell in love with my very dearest friend
And you could hear my heart break in the whispering of the wind
You are getting married soon and I’ll be there with a smile
But, underneath, my heart will still be aching all the while
Though it may take a lifetime for my broken heart to mend
I’ll be wishing you the best in the whispering of the wind
Author notes
Written January 14th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- Write it to make me cry... by Blind Sight.
500 points, ended February 14, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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This is an incredibly moving poem. Very beautiful, and so sad. Thanks for entering.
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This is a very sad piece you have here. It's very touching and well... full of emotion. It reminds me of the song 'Congratulations' by Blue October which is one of the songs I think of when I think of the reasons I started this contest. So good job with getting in tune of what I wanted. Good luck.
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gifted
wha....that one almost made me cry...you are very gifted... very much soo...
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Nice word flow
Being that I've been a member of Allpoetry since 05' I hate that I hadn't run across your poetry any sooner, but I'm glad I did now.. Another good poem... -
I loved the whispering wind.This poem was so sad.I cant imagen how uful it would have been to see my first love marry another person so heartbreaking.Hope u got over it.Nice poem good floo and powerful emotio in this keep writting and good luck in my cobntest soory for the delay
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that was such a beautiful write. i loved it so much! keep up the good work
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Perfect!
This is gorgeous, full of sentimentality, grace and kindness. To wish someone happiness while your own heart is breaking is one of the noblest of gestures. Congrats on the gold.
Mark
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congratulations on an excellent poem and a well deserved Gold award
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wow ! This was soo great. I could heasr your sadness and yet you look at it as in a sence of knowing life is going on. That maybe it just wasn't meant to be. You say so much is so little and I'm in awe. Great write and thanks for entering .
Chealsy -
wow absolutely brilliant stuff....this was really a powerful write, i could feel every drop of the emotions put in
well done...and congratulations on the trophy
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Hi. Thanks for entering my contest. Wow this poem is so sweet. It's touching, yet so sad. Getting your heart broken is one of the most hurtful feelings you can get. It's so sad that she was your first love but now she's with someone else. I loved your style, and the repetition of 'in the whispering of the wind', it made it all so more memorable. Well done ad good luck in the contest.
Emma xxx -
Wow this great. I don't really know this feeling but I do know the feeling of heartbreak and it sucks. It's so hard to get over your first love but everything will get better eventually. That is so sad...now i have tears in my eyes lol... Good job and good luck in my contest.
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i really like this poem. The word use is ... typical, but I love the whole whispering winds part at the end of every stanza...i really like the end of this poem.
great job
good luck
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This poem realy works for me as it just falls into place in my head. I think this kind of experience is something most people can identify with. Very readable, I could almost hear the wind whispering!
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that almost brought me to tears wonderfully done..... i loved this poem .... its increidibly moving..... Great job
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Wow, this moved me and brought tears to my eyes. I like the ongoing title and theme of the whispering of the wind. Thanks for the entry. -N
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"tears" actual tears, this is so sad and beautiful and great. and so many other words that i dont know about right now. my dad left my mom for her best friend, ive never been able to relate to that, and its a bit different, my mom hates my dad and step mom, but thats insignificant. Great write. sorry
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So sweet, so sad, so beautiful. Great job, first loves are so hard to get over. Thanks so much for entering, best of luck!!
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Aww this is extremely sweet! I love it! Hey I'm from Oklahoma too
Aimee
xo
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Keepsake poetry!
So beautiful Sewasham, all through the words I could hear a sigh,
sweet sorrow... faithfully remembering promises of the heart! A faint whisper in the wind... as I remember... do you remember my love -
This is the sweetest and most sad thing! There's so much feeling in your words. "And sent you all my kisses on the whispering of the wind"...it doesn't get much better than that! Good job
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Ohh this is lovely, we never get over our first loves do well. Beautiful write
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Ok...I think that this has to be one of the best poems I've read in a while. I really feel for you. You did this quite well...I could see this as it happened before me. Very good poem here. I love it.
~*Misty*~
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I love how you true emotions are showing through this poem the whole time it makes it quite deep and i love it that way just very impacting.This was a great write of something once happened and then accepting what's going to...great piece. Suggestion though the little faces make it seem childish you might wanna get rid of them.
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