The colors scream in cacophony,
a chorus line of orange purple blue
The neons screech and the piano thuds
in a multitude of hues
Lavender hums a minuet while black
bashes on the snare;
with a swirling mix of three left feet
and feathers twined in hair
Turqoise trumpeteers clang brass
and the children squeal in lime
Tangerine laughs with manic glee
while cerulean keeps time
Scarlet twirls around some beads
and thistle softly keeps
the perfect steps with burgundy
while magenta goes in leaps
And in their dissonant state of joy
the colors correspond;
with compliments payed from red to green
in synergy they bond
And from their jaring discordence
a pattern seems to spring
a palet of contempories
whose practiced voices ring
And when the piano thuds a note
the purest palest pink
together other voices rise
cacophoniously in sync
Cerise sings in the key of D
and the rest soon join in
with persian indigo adding bass
into the melodious din
Soon the clarinets add the orange red
the tuba midnight blue
the flutes add flower petal tones
and then the strings imbue
a flood of tones in every shade
from seafoam to dark green
in a veritable parade of tones
joyfully they sing
In cornflower blue and antique brass
in sienna and aquamarine
from cacophony their voices rise
and in harmony they ring
A mosaic forms; a complex dance
here-there the colors dart
in a thousand hues and shades they form
a master’s piece of art
Author notes
just for fun
A contest entry
- Your Best Pre-Written Rhyme by piccola.
800 points, ended August 15, 2008, 90 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Proudly Presenting: ROUND 1 by Walk-Free.
1000 points, ended August 31, 2008, 78 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - OPTIONS I- GOLD - SILVER - BRONZE FOR EACH by Florida Sunshine.
475 points, ended August 16, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Chicken a la Boynton by WaterChild Reborn.
1550 points, ended October 20, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I enjoyed this, but it was too long and abstract for my toddler cojudge. still, thank you for entering!
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i like this. I thought of synesthesia, although i don't know much about it. I just think your poem is beautiful and I think the last line is great.
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I love the colours used and how beautifully and creatively they were incorporated.
it was done all in fun wasn't it. 
congrats on the HM and good luck in the contest!
loveees,
transit~
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wow wow wow!
this is genius! it was amazingly written, and your words were so pure! keep penning, thanks for the entry!
~beauty of silence
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awesome. loved this. it's great!
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i thoroughly enjoyed myself fully while reading this piece.
loved how you incoperated music to colour!
brilliant work
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Hello.
Reads like you got synesthesia or are on a good trip, amongst other things, ahahaa. The language used is vibrant and expressive, and the metaphorical amalgamation with sound and sight is one I appreciate on many levels. I thought your rhythm and rhyme was very well done, you stayed true to the structure well. Am sure you can guess by now my stance on the punctuation, in this case (commas and full stops (periods)), hahah. A minor point of course. A good write, and congratulations on the Honourable Trophy.
My regards.
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If color was ever music it would be here. There is an old Disney movie called 'Fantasia' [I believe] ... in this movie is a classical song with all the instruments. As I read this I could see ~ the colors splash upon the screen as each instruments called recognition.
-- I did note the rhyme, and thought you did a terrific job with that. I think maybe a line space
may help separate the thoughts
and sounds.
I found it interesting your use of punctuation is only in the form of Caps and a semi-colon. This makes me wonder what more is there to this poem, I may not be making the connection too.
I absolutely love your choice of the color with the instrument, it is absolutely perfect choices. I do enjoy classical music and very well aware of all the instruments within. There for this poem really does it complete justice.
Thanks for entering the contest, it was my complete pleasure to read and review your work. ~
Best of luck to you,
Florida Sunshine
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Hey I got two comments suggesting I break up the lines in the piece, so I experimented and decided that it is much better that way. Thank you!!!
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In love with the imagery here. The vast hue of color and the bg so fitting. The only critique I have is that I think the write would be better off with line breaks of some sort. Stanzas or something. Thank you for entering.
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You are one talented chick. I am glad I stumbled on your poems. You have a beautiful way with words. I love all the colors you use and your vocabulary is vast. A beautiful flow, and it almost feels like music.
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