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seeing me


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in the dark and soft falling rain
you hold my momentary gaze
i fall into your deep blue eyes
and i am completely mesmerized
that you should want to look at me

we play the recognition game
who will be the first to proclaim
that i am hiding in plain sight
but amazed that you are so polite
that you should want to look at me

your confusion as you stare
is evidenced by the frown you wear
wondering just what it is you perceive
and hoping no one else sees
that you should want to look at me.

i am to all just an open book
but can you tell by just one look?
oh and don’t forget to bring
your magic tv decoder ring
should you want to really see me.


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  • rhondasail
    August 12, 2008

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    I love the last lines...sort of tongue-in-cheek and yet so intimate and filled with warmth (and a bit of sarcasm for the not -so-kind stares)...You have a gift for the softness of touch, Richard. Undeniably felt, gently administered...another gem from your Shepherd's crook-I mean pen... ...Blessings to you, my Shepherd, Rhonda


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    August 12, 2008

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    This Richard is absolutely beautiful as always

    wonderful job interesting and unique, enjoyable to read

    best wishes

    Passions