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Barefoot Barely Breathing

Since you turned your back and strode away
Life has changed from gay to gray

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  • Desire gold member
    August 16, 2008

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    Thank You1!

    Thank You for Your entry: Barefoot Barely Breathing
    This piece tugged hard at Spirit and while I was reading which I do several times~ Images come to me in many forms~ while taking in Your words: Sinced you turned your back- Now for some reason when I read the first few lines- I kept this image of a Toyota 4 Runner- given those words also reference to gas guzzler- and seeing a male wearing a cowboy hat- reference to 1950's- and may sound strange but phrase: first kiss- also reference to overlooking the stars- phrase: the heavens bore witness- then seeing a star fall Whether metaphor or symbolism
    Hopefully this makes some sense~
    Excellent take on the prompt ~
    Magnificent images & message You have brought forth

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent also Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • jscribbled
    August 12, 2008
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    how sad