No Fixed Returns

the sunset pallor of a winter moon

is cast across the frigid lands,

where we step

from gentle autumn breezes

to the depths of boreal gloom.

she danced on jewelled leaves

in fading summer's glow

that lingers in fallen forests,

alive with dying light.

the seasons move without biding,

and soon all will be snow.

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A contest entry

Quickie. Because I Feel Like It! by xCandieKissesx. 470 points, ended August 13, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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CaliOkie
November 2, 2008

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Well deserved gold. By the subtle use of the term "as we step" you have turned what would have been an nice poem about the seasons into a metaphor for the passage of life. So, this works at a very personal level -- perhaps idiosyncratically -- because I have been contemplating the advance of years recently. But universally, this speaks to the concept of passing time, life unspooling, and the general progression from womb to tomb.

Excellent. You write with such a crisp, clean style, and utilize a rich vocabulary that nuances your meanings in a way that is refreshing. Thank you for poetry of substance and some real inspiration. You demonstrate talent and skill in abundance.

Garrison
luvdrkchocolate
August 13, 2008

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Oh. This is a pretty little poem that you have penned in here. I could see why you won gold on this because it is short but it's filled with lots of deep thoughts and images that show what compelled you when you were looking at that picture. I thought you did a good job of expressing yourself on this one.
kraazk05
August 13, 2008

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Great take on this prompt. I can't critique a thing about this. Definitely trophy worthy.

Fantastic job, and congratz!
Riamh
August 13, 2008
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Congratulations on the gold. very well deserved!
And Hyetal
August 13, 2008
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And Hyetal
August 13, 2008

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bookmarked.
faderman1959
August 13, 2008

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Beautifully written! Great description and word selection here! One of your best I have read! Well deserving of the gold! Congrats!
MichaelBe
August 13, 2008
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this is a really nice write and is perfect for the pic, great work!
xCandieKissesx
August 12, 2008

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Wowie!
You took my favourite picture, and turned it into pure beauty. I'm speechless because this piece was FANTASTIC! You just blew my mind with this! Seriously. Excellent job and good luck!
Solidified
August 12, 2008

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I love the photo. It's absolutely beautiful, and shows how something can look stunning no matter what. Your poem was a pleasure to read.