Promised at birth as the Dark Angel’s prize
by those who would bargain to prevent their demise,
she was steeped in the dark arts as she was raised
yet her soul was untouched, in pureness it blazed,
like a beacon of hope on the darkest night.
On her eighteenth birthday (three sixes combined)
she and her betrothed were to be intertwined,
not a union of love but of ultimate sin.
Her priceless dowry – her soul deep within,
for this was the source of his pending delight.
He had waited eternity for a moment like this.
She would soon be his and with the first kiss
he would, for a moment, feel the light on his face
that was forever denied him with his fall from grace;
a moment’s redemption but at what cost?
The moon coldly shone as the coven invoked
arcane rituals as the ground shook and smoked
calling forth Satan to claim his virgin bride.
As he sulfurously arose, he would not be denied
that which his vanity had lost.
The bargain was for her body, not that which dwelt inside.
She’d learned her lessons well, released her soul and died.
His scream was filled with anguish and his pain was clear.
As he knelt above her, he almost found salvation…
…in a tear.
Author notes
Prompt: Picture
Picture Credit: Unknown
10 – 25 lines (and I used them all 
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A contest entry
- Picture Prompt by Angelflower.
600 points, ended August 22, 2008, 14 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - BATTLE OF THE GOLDS by Swan song.
5500 points, ended September 6, 2008, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Comments Always Welcome but I Won't Turn Down Fluffy One's Either :D
Comments
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Now that was one heck of a tale in rhyme!
Excellent
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Wow. this was amazing!!! The flow was flawless!! the rhyme, though a little 'out of balance" in some areas was really wonderful!! I really loved your story line here.. it was really amazing.. and the ending just blew me away!! bravo!! thank you very much for sharing!! best of luck in the contest!!
Angel
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Oh this is outstanding
the flow, the rhyme
the tale you spun
You did more here than I ever
could with this.. and I love it
so much..
Joann
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Yes, I was captivated...fantastic take on the prompt. Well done.
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and you used them well my lover
the rhyme and the flow flawless. I love your poem so much. you captured my attention and held it through the entire poem I like the last 2 lines especially this part
"he almost found salvation....in a tear"
excellent job
good luck in the contest my lover
kat
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