As few can find first measure of result
will I collapse and wail at fate’s caprice
and see my loss as one more life insult
while letting my annoyances increase?
The painless path is not the way to peace
and joy as I retreat from fortune’s door;
not willing to be turned away once more.
Or will I rise above the lot I’m dealt
and steel myself to try until I win;
to put aside the many stings I’ve felt
and place myself in jeopardy again?
To knock until they hear shows discipline,
determination is its own reward;
not resting until every trail’s explored.
Author notes
3."Perseverance is a great element of success. If you only knock
long enough and loud enough at the gate, you are sure to wake up somebody." Henry Wadsworth Longfellow (1807 - 1882)
Rhyme royal, rime royal:
a stanza of seven ten-syllable lines,
rhyming ababbcc
In a list
A contest entry
- Torn by Pamela A Lamppa.
1750 points, ended August 20, 2008, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How do you think I could improve this poem?
Comments
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WOW...NICE FORM WILL TRY THIS...THE POEM MEANWHILE CAPTURES YOUR EMOTIONS REALLY WELL...
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Oh Oh Oh what wonderful delight to read and enjoy! You have done this before, there is no doubt!
Mechanically, this is perfect! BUT most importantly your have NAILED this prompt! Splendid splendid splendid.
Wonderful use of language and imagery. I especially loved your last three lines which show such an astute understand of Wadsworth's words. Dear poet, this is excellent.
Thank you for a superb entry. You have certainly raised the bar. Bravo! Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela
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Well structured, beginning with a question and exploring a few options with a good strong title to lead your words.
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Pefect Rhyme Royal for the contest prompt. I salute such expertise. A pleasure to read and enjoy. ~Bramble
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