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In arms of an angel the body did lay
quiet and motionless as the angel prayed
broken is she the body i have but bringing of souls is all that you ask
onced loved by many now despaired but the soul she had has long left here
weep for her not for she is alive
in lifes only afterlife she now will abide
you to some day will have this pleasure as long as you believe in the lords after life   

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this is what happens when you die you only get one chance to make this choice

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  • Angelflower
    August 22, 2008

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    This was really interesting.. I really liked it.. the flow was nice and the imagery was great as well!!The emotion I found in this piece is very surprising but wonderful none the less.. Thank you very much for sharing.. best of luck in the contest!!


    Angel


  • AloneForever-
    August 13, 2008

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    Powerful write!!
    This is the other contest huh?
    Really really good words..really good flow
    And guess what! I understand
    Thnx for just pointing out what its about too
    Really amazing write.I loved it
    Good luck in the contest


  • Kimmigirl
    August 13, 2008

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    Very Well done

    I really enjoy reading your work, I love the first three lines of this poem, In arms of an angek the body did lay,quiet and motionless as the angel prayed,broken is te body I have but bringing of souls is all that you ask. Really enjoyed it.


  • Lexie
    August 12, 2008

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    awww, this poem it is so so beautiful, love it bunches. the details is a work of art, adn i really loved reading it, almost as much as i love talking to you. best of luck in this conest, hope you win it. =)


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    August 12, 2008
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    Nice job. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Mr.
    August 12, 2008

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    That's really uplifting. The first two lines were great, "In arms of an angel the body did lay
    quiet and motionless as the angel prayed."

    I don't want to sound like I'm nitpicking, but I think I should point out that "In the arms of an angel" is the title to a song by Sarah McLachlin (which played at my grandmother's funeral) in case you didn't know that. But it was still a really good poem.

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