Sometimes I sit
Under this tree
Caught in a midsummer shower
And think
How nice it would be
Just for once
To own an orange raincoat
Author notes
thanks for reading
A contest entry
- Summer Poem by Mortal.
900 points, ended October 9, 2008, 30 entries
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i really like the last line. nice and simple and beautifully written.
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I like your simplicity - a look, for once, at how it might be better, more refreshing, if people wished for things as small as this, like orange raincoats. It seems to me that you have a hope for the greed of humanity to be remedied. Somehow I got a very beautiful vibe off of this. Good luck in the contest.
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Awwww, I liked this. it was short and sweet. and certainly didn't follow expectations. I wonder though, was it random selection of words so to speak or is there more of a meaning?
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hahaha
I love short poems. they're the best, they can potentially hold the most meaning and stories in the least amount of words.
i have that orange raincoat, huh?
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this is very good.
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I like the freshness of this, and the random, quirky thought. For some reason, though, I don't like the first word. I think the poem would work a lot better if you took out 'sometimes' - mainly because, being caught in a midsummer shower is a momentary thing. Very nice poem.
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