Do not Baa Baa,
you goddamned black sheep,
becuase you hardly look like a sheep,
I need not ask if you do have wool,
because they have scraped it all you fool,
Need not even wonder,
because you ugly brownish goat like sheep,
you have no master or dame,
or even a little boy across the lane,
they are all wailing,
looking at your reduced frame that is lame.
Author notes
Baa Baa Black Sheep
they are all wailing,
looking at your reduced frame that is lame.
most of us are in that painful situation..which I hae described for this sheep..in a rhyme..that is anti rhyme.
A contest entry
- Twisted Nursery Rhymes by Dmonik.
1750 points, ended August 30, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Ohhhhhhh That Hurt by Juggalo-King.
600 points, ended September 2, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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LOL...omg...this is twisted alright...love it!
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I want you to know I really hater to do this but you broke two rules one being cussing the biggest reason two no name on it sorry I was trying to be fair now if you want to change the words and resummit it I will be glad to except your entry but as it now is I can't leave it in the contest .thanks you for sharing it with us. -
While this is a good poem it has not won a honorable mention. So I must remove form the contest. Sorry. But may I host another contest that it could enter.
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good luck
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Excellent
I really rather like this whimsical little write. Especially, since I have written several whimsical pieces myself. Imagery, rhythm and rhyme are just fine. -
yeah this is a very different version of the baa baa black sheep that I know...in a different perspective
it's brilliant
albeit the sarcasm and the humor
i just love the idea you have put into this
it's very rock and roll...in my opinion
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Never thought id read baa baa black sheep angsty style lol. Nice job good luck in the contest
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Thank you for entering
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I liked this. you have quite a unique way with words in this poem of yours. I really love your fluid like words from line to line and really liked the over all complexion to this poem as it was just incredible. anyways nice work all round and keep it up =) good luck with the contest
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Change your category! This is most definitely not spiritual!!!!
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Well, in aiming for a twisted nursery rhyme, that is exactly what you got. Good luck in that contest!
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Thanks for your entry. I shall read thoroughly upon judging. However, while it's obvious you used Baa Baa Black Sheep, you haven't written it in your AN. Please amend this.
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