It's not that I'm staring at you,
nor am I wishing that you'll stare back at me.
It's not that I long for more than a shake hand,
nor am I wishing that a hug would be more appropriate.
It's not that I've been whispering sweet nothings,
nor am I wishing that I could say those aloud.
It's not that I dreamed that I am her,
nor am I wishing that I am the one with you.
It's not that when you read this,
you'll be giving me those what I needed.
It's not what you think,
that I am really falling in love,
may be, was,
and I still?
Author notes
sorry for these late editing...
tnx...
A contest entry
- Quickie :] by innocence jaded.xx.
600 points, ended August 16, 2008, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Make me Cry. ... One way or another
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pretty you
I love this! oh yeah, so we share the same sentiments on being infatuated with unattainable guys
ako tutupi talaga ako hehe
yeah I could just agree with your title lol
Congrats on the HM
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This is pretty well written.I think I would have made it a little shorter but you were easy to follow and you kept the readers interest all the way through.I can see why you are an honorable winner.You are blessed with the pen that's for sure.I think the effectiveness of the title was really good.the last line you were asking and not quite sure if it is love.Great ending.
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i think this is a really well written poem by a very talented writer
i hope you will continue to write poems as good as this one
i have also read some of your other poems that you have written and i completely loved them all.
i hope that if i ever have a contest that you among others will enter. -
That was such a sweet poem! I loved the denial theme through it and the ending conclusion of admittance.
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i love this alot!
so good and it think that you folowed the prompt well.
we were in the same contest so i understand where you were going with this
although my poem was in the opposite direction
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Well done! Reminds me of thoughts on my first job (sigh)
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Well, I definitely liked this. I can really relate. hah. You wrote the feeling pretty much perfectly. Thanks for entering & good luck =) ♥
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