Mirror
shows my shadow
the echo, the memory
of a man who has been shattered
pieces tossed to the fickle city breeze
sticking to the chain-link fences
just garbage in the wind
as seen in my
mirror
Loving
is not easy
when the many branches
of lifes weeping willow entwine
keeping lovers apart, who keep trying
until broken hearts are mended
seeking only laughter
hiding no more
loving
Author notes
Love you Tory.
Used all word bank words in order in a Rictameter chain. 
Now for the word bank: (you may use another form of the word)
Mirror
shadow
echo
memory
shatter
breezes
fences
loving
branches
weeping
keeping
trying
broken
mended
seeking
laughing
hiding
Okay ... that's it!
Rictameter:
Rictameter is a scheme similar to Cinquain.
Starting your first line with a two syllable word,
you then consecutively increase the number of syllables per line by two.
i.e.:
2, 4, 6, 8, 10
Then down again,
8, 6, 4, 2
Making the final line the same two syllable word you began with.
In a list
A contest entry
- Rictameter Word Bank by piccola.
900 points, ended August 17, 2008, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Rictameter PW contest by Rhythm Child.
400 points, ended October 26, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Awe, this is a really good poem and actually gave me the image of a city park or a boardwalk. This is a really smooth flowing piece. I wish you the best of luck in this contest.
Ignis Corpus -
amazing. I love it. thank you for entering
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Wow!
Truly worthy of the Gold! This simply amazes me. I've only seen this form as few times & it dazzles me. I've saved this page as you explain the meaning of Rictameter & that you formed this trophy winner with a word bank in the order of the words given is even more stunning! The way you 'entwine' the thought, keep the theme in form & use so many metaphors in such an elegant way is beyond my words to express! I don't impress easily. I'm so glad I happened upon your work as a result of commenting on Dennis' entry into this Contest! I loved his submission & wanted to see what won Gold! So glad I pursued!
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great job using all those words. Lovely form you ricts take too. thank you so much for entering
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Well done, I had done the all words too...but havent posted, because well, I just havent lol.
Great job here, I love it and you
Tory
good luck honey
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You just waited for me to post so you can go kick my ass in the contest, thats why.
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