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About a Girl

I am nothing
by myself
how can I call myself a man
I am nothing

a sore tooth
a bad wish
and an empty stomach
I am nothing more
without her

I wish I could say something
like I'll find someone else
but honestly
this time I'm not so sure
I've never been so unsure

My past is a grave yard
some things buried
but everything's dead

How could I think for one moment
for just one moment
That I might be good enough for her
When I'm rarely good enough for myself

I am dumb
I am weak
and alone

 

but I think I'm okay with that.

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  • Cat10
    August 17, 2008

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    ohhhh nice!! I like it
    "My past is a grave yard
    some things buried
    but everything's dead" stuck out to me nice job buddy