My blood runs,
Drips onto the floor,
I breath deeply,
Trying to slow,
My racing heart,
The cold steal,
Rests against my,
Throbbing head,
A razor lies,
On the floor,
Useless and,
Bloodstained,
It did not help,
But this gun will,
I think of everything,
That I did not do,
And everyone,
That I'm going to lose,
But I do not falter,
I pull the trigger,
A sharp ring,
Echoes in my head,
Blood flies,
And flesh meets floor,
My world turns to glass,
Then it shatters,
And fades to black,
All the pain,
All the confusion,
Just fades away.
Author notes
it becomes more tempting each and everyday.....
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Well this is quite a deep and sad poem that you have written here... I hope you'll feel better soon!
Thank you for entering the contest...
Leander -
nice write you have here. another lost to the hands of death before their time...i came close once but decided against it. I love this though it's very powerful to say the least...good luck.
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Ouch. That was very intense.
You have a talent with words.
I hope you don't waste it by killing yourself. -
Depressing...
...but good. It shows how desperate some people are when it comes to suicide. I like the surreal realism that you intwined into the piece. Very nice job! -
Once a person read the beginning u wanna read it all.
"My blood runs,
Drips onto the floor,
I breath deeply,
Trying to slow,"
thats a great stanza..thanks for sharing and for the comment on mine as well. keep writing
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I can't think of anything good enough to say
Awesome, Amazing, Fantastic, Holy Sh%#, Ilove it. I will read this everyday!!!!! -
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haha wow thanks
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Wow.
Love and Suicide are the two most powerful emotions to write about. The pain love brings, and the amount of times it brings thoughts of suicide. When it comes down to it sweetie, it's not worth it.
We've all been there,
And if we haven't yet, we will.
This is an incredible write,
I can feel your emotions.
Thanks for entering, good luck.
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