Oft times in dreams I see the face of thee
So beautiful that inwardly I sigh
For you have touched the deepest part of me
And that I love you true is not a lie
It will be true beyond the day I die
But knowing you are happy fills my soul
With joy that lifts me up and leaves me whole
My precious dreams of you I do embrace
My memories of you I hold so dear
Within my heart you hold a special place
And I desire to keep you ever near
Though there be times when yet I’ll shed a tear
Because your love no longer shines on me
Even then I cherish my dreams of thee
Author notes
Poetic Form: Rhyme Royal - Prompt - Dreams
A contest entry
- Poetic Form: Rhyme Royal - Prompt - Dreams by Little Eagle.
700 points, ended August 23, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Pam,
This took hold of my heart and I definitely had
tears in my eyes.What a beautiful and loving poem.
So endearing.
You are so talented my friend:~)
Take care
Love Peace
campanaro
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Thank you! You are a blessing!
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This is TRUE Love
Beautiful (smooth) rhythm and rhyme.
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Thank you for the wonderful comment! Pam
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Hi Pam,
Wow! These words are beautiful. From what I've read of your poetry so far, it reaches right into the inner depths of the reader, at least it does me. I can relate to the words of this poem so much. They are haunting. Hope to be able to produce work half as good as this one day.
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Thank you so much for such a lovely comment! I think you have the imagination and talent to do well! I only started to write last June and I find it very therapeutic for my soul.
Pam
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Very Beautiful!!!
I love the stunning imagery here, and your timeless message of eternal, bittersweet love is very touching, as well. Great work!!! Thank you for sharing your muse's creativity. Peace, Cyn
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Thank you Cyn for your uplifting comment on my poem. Blessings! Pam
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Oh wow this is just so
beautiful Pam indeed!
Love the flow and a great
masterpiece indeed!,Hazel
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Thank you sweet Hazel! Pam
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Emotions powerfully described
"For you have touched the deepest part of me."
"Though there be times when yet I’ll shed a tear
Because your love no longer shines on me
Even then I cherish my dreams of thee."
If it were not for the first line above the last three lines would not be as powerful as they are. You have given yourself so completely that even the dimming of love in the other cannot erase your love for them.
Powerful! Thanks for sharing these thoughts
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Thank you Ian for your thoughtful comment.
Love is so compelling and it is amazing just how deeply it reaches us inside. Pam
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Thank you for your entry
Yes this is the second entry I have seen that speaks of love and how it is lost and we continue to dream that person is near.
Nice job on the form, though you were off by one syllable count. in the fourth line of the second stanza. Good job on keeping to the rhyme scheme.
I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.
God Bless
Tammy -
I love the Rhyme Royal and you used it to its full advantage here composing this magical poem. I love the sadness yet the feeling of hope.
"Because your love no longer shines on me
Even then I cherish my dreams of thee"
Love,
Amera♥
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Nice one Pam !
good mixture of memories and dreams, wish you the best of luck in the competition
John
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