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lilium

you challenged me to a duel
pistils at dawn you said
you stymied me with your touch
that stemmed from your petal smile...

A contest entry

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  • Night Hope gold member
    August 31, 2008

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    First of all, let me thank you for your entry into my contest. I appreciate the time & effort that you spent on your poem immensely, because I completely recognize & understand the symptoms as being my own, as well. lol

    Also, please let me apologize & ask for your understanding this somewhat generic comment; I have a migraine & need to get this contest judged so I can get to bed. I don't have a lot of time or energy to be online these days. Which is partly why I'm commenting at 3 am.

    This is the part that I liked the most:

    "you stymied me with your touch
    that stemmed from your petal smile..."


    I thank you sincerely for sharing this part of your Self with the rest of us lost, angelic souls...Keep writing...This world needs all the Poets & Scribes it can hold. Especially now.

    Be good to yourself & those around you; it really does matter, as you know.

    ~ Wanda


  • just mercedes gold member
    August 11, 2008
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    You are so...

    and your poem is so...

    I like it, so...