I am like a foreign language
With the right Rosetta Stone
You can decode the gods'
words and I am no exception.
You can read me like a book
If you care to count the pages
I will reveal the secrets in this chest
One by one until there are none.
The prettiest crystals have
to be cleaned; smear the dirt and
grime and slowly it will gleam
Don't drop me.
Most mysteries are just un-
explained facts you've yet to discover, and
unlimited hypotheses will get you nowhere
without a few experiments.
Vaults aren't meant to be broken, they
are meant to be opened or elsewise there
would be no lock on the oh-so-supposedly
inpenetrable steel doors.
And so it seems that I may be a little evasive
but I promise you, tap lightly on my walls long
enough, and they will fall down in slow motion or
like the Great Wall of China, my defenses crumble
Even as they stand.
Please tell me what you think
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I love the extende metaphor and the imagery in this piece you create wonderful imagery and are a great writer all together
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Really amazing write!
I enjoyed.
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Wonderful!
Everyone certainly is their own separate world which is what sometimes makes understanding difficult. Thankfully, it's not impossible, and it just takes looking in and placing yourself inside their shoes(or mind) for a while.
Breaking in is certainly less rewarding, as there is no one there to show you al the secret hiding places.
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Very nice flow! I love the language metaphor!
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wow, I love it, brings so many things tomind its incredible
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Fine work here. Strong flow, depth, and solid rhyme. what more can one want? Keep up the solid work.
Nice to meet you.
and 
Creatress
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There's a nice flow to this, with excellent use of metaphor and allusion.
Stanza #2 was excellent. Well done!
Clappy dudes!
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Bravo, bravo!!!
Very well written. Loved how you used the Rosetta Stone as a reference. Very original.
How you been, emo girl?
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Thanks!
I've been swell et tu?
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Estoy bien.
Would that be your neck in your profile pic, lol? If so, nice. What does it say?
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As I said before, sad and yet achingly hopeful. Excellent word choice and use of sezura. Also liked your allusions. Overall, this is superb. Cheers.
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