Do you Hate the person
dislike them
kill them
destroy them
terminate your soul
I want to kiss Her
touch her
love her
be intimate
touch her waist
the stomach, let it talk to me
kiss her stomach
up to the breast
her mouth
her neck
her eye's
below the extreme
how to stop the thoughts
kill the images
destroy the heart
an terminate my soul
My first Love
who never loved me back
A contest entry
- A love That Surpasses All. by Poetryintheblood.
525 points, ended September 15, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What to Do?
Comments
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Thank you for your entry, good luck in my contest, Josie
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Oh my...how I want to be kissed
to be touched
to be loved
to be intimate
to be caressed at waist
at stomach
at breast
Oh my...how I wish
to be kissed at mouth
at neck
at eyes
below the extreme...
by YOU!
Brilliant piece!
Kisses all over, honey!
Galaxy2
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This piece is very strong, especially with the way it is ordered. Beginning with the feelings of loss and how to deal with that and then moving into the feelings of needing intimacy with that person, and then again as if realizing the end of something you have needed, the bitterness and feelings of loss are back. It is almost like taking the reader through your mind and heart. I really enjoyed it, despite the sadness of it.
I dont believe though that we should ever "destroy the heart", but instead take the good and the growth from that relationship with us.
Best wishes.
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