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Dawns' Mist

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Dawn’s Mist

The forest mist is dressed in white
and blankets me as if by lace.
Her magic ushers dawn's new light.

Transparent veils of crystallite
create a presence in this place.
The forest mist is dressed in white.

Diaphanous vapors, O so slight;
with gentle hands caress my face.
Her magic ushers dawn's new light.

The shadows scurry from my sight
and all this beauty I embrace.
The forest mist is dressed in white.

She danced upon the edge of night
and entered with majestic grace.
Her magic ushers dawn's new light.

The rising sun will soon shine bright
and she’ll retreat without a trace.
The forest mist is dressed in white;
her magic ushers dawn's new light.

 

 

 

Author notes

Villanelle:
A Villanelle is a nineteen-line poem consisting of a very specific rhyming scheme:
aba aba aba aba aba abaa.

The prompt is the picture and this quote:

"Move along these shades
In gentleness of heart; with gentle hand
Touch~for there is a spirit in the woods." Excerpt from Nutting - William Wordsworth

Image Credit: Halos by Simon Zierke

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  • CitrineSunrise silver member
    August 24, 2008

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    The rhyme scheme in this villanelle is simple, but effective. I have often read that you are the "Queen of Form Poetry" and although I think there are several others who share that title, your work never disappoints. Since "dawn" is not plural the apostrophe goes before the "s". Good luck in this contest. Peace, Liz


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    August 24, 2008

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    This is one I must have missed and I'm sorry for that, but I am so glad I found it. It is beautiful in every way, soft as a mist and just as enticing.

    All the best in the contest

    Love
    Sue


  • Tirrell
    August 21, 2008

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    Quietly beautiful, I love the cinamatic quality of your words, for I can sit back and witness the imagery so beautifully wrought before my eyes.


  • Blue Rew silver member
    August 20, 2008

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    Beautiful...
    Here, your lines draw one into the image
    giving it meaning and soft light.
    Personification is one of my most favorite
    devices and here, you employ it with grace
    and substance that is subtle and appealing.
    Blue


  • Wandika gold member
    August 15, 2008

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    Perfect Form Amera

    I really enjoy reading form poetry done properly. This you have accomplished with style.

    Jim


  • Desire gold member
    August 12, 2008

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    Wow~

    Beauty of a verse my Friend and Love the lines:
    Diaphanous vapors, O so slight;
    with gentle hands caress my face.
    Her magic ushers dawns' new light.
    Excellent form- Smooth as buttermilk
    Form Queen Love it!!
    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet One
    Best wishes too
    and much love & light~ Desire~*~


  • PerVirtuous
    August 12, 2008

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    A very enchanting villanelle with a sweet flow and meter. A great entry in the contest. I love the way you interpreted the picture. Three very clappy bunnies for you!


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    August 12, 2008

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    oh my...this is lovely indeed! I must try to write a poem in this form. Simply divine Amera! Pam


  • poetryality silver member
    August 12, 2008

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    It has been a season since I wrote a villanelle. You inspire me to try my hand at this lovely form again. Your poem is utterly beautiful. I am sure it is a winner! You are the form poetry queen. Simply elegant! The best to you in the challenge.

    Much Love ♥

    Renee


  • And Hyetal
    August 12, 2008

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    Beautiful as usual. It amazes me still how you can create such beautiful work out of rhyming... I'm not able to rhyme, myself.

    This poem has a comforting feeling about it... The rhyming actually makes it somewhat gentler over all.



    ~Cassie


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 12, 2008

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    This reads so beautifully.. it is soft and gentle, has a touch of the mystical in it. I could read this over and over and never tire of it! I will definitely be bookmarking this!

    Fantastic work sis.. in both Form and content.. I love it!


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    August 12, 2008

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    Delicately crafted, Sis, with some nice touches throughout. Very atmospheric too.

    The only thing I see as a weakness is line 4. It just seems to be a bit of a filler. Otherwise, there is much to admire and commend, and I can't refuse you a full line-up of bunnies.



  • malmadre gold member
    August 11, 2008

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    It reads perfectly to me! most importantly, it captures the theme of there being a spirit in the woods. The wording is magical..


  • myrataal silver member
    August 11, 2008

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    Wonderful!

    Atmospheric, gentle, and repetitive ... in the very style of Amera, Queen of Structured Poetry!

    Loved the regal touch of this beautiful poem.

    Myra


    • Amera gold member
      August 11, 2008
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      aww... thank you Myra. Finding a comment from you is like finding that small special present under the Christmas Tree.


  • StarEyes
    August 11, 2008

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    Sis,

    What a wonderful read this is!! This is fantastic! I love your take on the picture, as well as the quote! Fantastic!!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Rose Angel gold member
    August 11, 2008

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    Oh how nice to be back to your poetry! I do love this gentle verse all the way through. It shows your gentle spirit, and it encourages me to read it again and again! I do love the forest and the presence you convey through it all! Bravo my dear!


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    August 11, 2008

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    Well I was first y ou hear me JEff lmao ..I was doing a response..took me awhile s

    here you go Amera, I did try hard.
    I love you honey

    http://allpoetry.com/poem/4505589

    Tory


  • HisDirtyLiLPoet
    August 11, 2008

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    Ah, cool! I think you did an outstanding job presenting this interpretation of Wordsworth's work and the art work too ... And in a Villanelle! You're an amazing poetess!

    Hope you had a beautiful weekend and your Monday was pleasant.

    Love,
    She-ra


  • cricketjeff gold member
    August 11, 2008

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    I'm not Villanelle fan, as you know, but this is delightful in wonderful meter and with totally charming content.

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