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become a butterfly

Her beauty moves my soul,
Takes my breath away,
So young,
So helpless,
Like a caterpillar struggling to become a butterfly,
Become herself,
And not what they aspire for her,
I wish I could help ease her pain,
Her suffering,
If only for a moment,
But I cannot,
For it would ruin her beautiful breakthrough,
Being able to fly away from me,
From everything,
Absolutely  free of the chains that once bound her.

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  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    October 9, 2008
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    Thank you for your beautifully worded entry, good luck in my contest, Josie


  • movedon
    September 5, 2008

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    Transformation can be such a beautiful thing. I love that you were so...delicate with this write. It made for a very lovely poem to read Many deep lines, hard to pick just one that I like.

    Warmest,
    Mylee


  • MichaelBe
    September 5, 2008

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    very nice entry, i most liked "ruin her beautiful breakthrough", its a cool line. very nice and colourful write,

    Michael


  • Swan song gold member
    August 23, 2008
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    Very good nice entry


  • Hebz
    August 20, 2008

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    This's an awesome write, I was captured by its simplicity, yet it's very meaningful.

    Thnx for entering & Best of Luck

    GloriousGift
    Heba

  • piccola silver member
    August 16, 2008
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    great read. thank you for the entry however you added nothing to the author notes and everyone has already had their one warning.


  • Dark Otter
    August 15, 2008

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    Pretty little poem

    that just won't go away. I can't say why but I like it and consider it a finalist. Something in it touches me, so it will get some recognition.


  • Elletee
    August 13, 2008
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    I helped you write this.


  • Topaze gold member
    August 12, 2008
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    Very nice piece, well done. Thank you for your fine entry in this contest.


  • wolfwatcher
    August 11, 2008
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    that is definitely pretty sweet Phil and helper :-P

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