Thirteen Candles
Powers that be,
I call upon thee,
To either hear my plea,
And set my spell to work,
Or set my spirit free!
I turn off the lights
And thirteen candles I light;
Green for loyalty,
And blue for bravery;
And so I chant the characteristics
In my lover, I want and see.
A red glittery candle for Our love,
And a white one for endurance and strength.
A pretty pink one for tenderness
And a nice navy blue for sense and intelligence.
A turquoise candle for Our tolerance;
Mauve for protection; a shielding candle.
Purple for sacrifice,
Yellow for sensibility,
And My favourite,
Deep orange for Our passion!
And last but not least,
Silver for patience,
For Me and My Love;
Patience for a passionate lover
- me –
and gold for Our faithfulness
and fidelity.
Powers that be,
I call upon thee,
To either hear my plea,
And set my spell to work,
Or set my spirit free!
By: Nada Adel Sobhi
Author notes
Thank you Midnight Rose for the title.. I loved it.
Sorry about the rhyme.. I wanted to rhyme it at first so it would sound more witchy but oh well.. i used mostly half-rhymes and eventually got back to my free-verse...
Be honest but not rude.
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its kind of creepy. i thought it was good though. lots of metaphor in it and symbolism. i would be careful though. it makes you sound a bit insane. very powerful!lol!
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A Magical Poem
Its a Magical Poem almost a Spell from within...
Powers that be,
I call upon thee,
To either hear my plea,
And set my spell to work,
Or set my spirit free!
This is the bit that I like the best, Saying that its all good as a whole...
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Awesome job. Keep up the great work and keep writing great pieces like this one!!! You have enough talent for probably all of us here at Allpoetry! Truly a great write. Such an astoudning and amazing job. If you feel like it, check out my poems and feel free to comment them! Be honest, please! Thanks so much for sharing this piece with all of us here at Allpoetry!
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Good Write!
You make an intriguing use of intermingled rhyme and free verse. Your style of free verse reminds me of Hal March, a US poet from the 1920's-30's who wrote the same way (See his book, "The Wild party," to understand what I mean.) I loved the evocative comparison of color to emotion!
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very dark. and very well done. I loved it. ~ hdb.
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love it
a love spell, me likes -
Despite the change from rhyme to free verse, this was a wonderful poem, with a great sentiment. Well done. I liked it.
Be well,
Slayer -
dark, mysterious but kind of catchy
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I don't like rhyming poems,
and this was pretty forced.
the idea is nice,
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Ah I really like super like it. It's inspiring, i want to try that too. It's so very pretty... good job
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I really like it!
I love the magic theam,and the poem flows really well,A very enjoyable read!Good luck in the contest! -
Quite unique, neat and nifty, the poem is a philer of sorts calling on unnamed forces for a perfect love/lover... I liked it a ton! bravo... bravo...
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yes... very witchy
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