Tattered and bruised
a heart crushed by disappointment.
Watching helplessly as her mind is lost
on an open highway of despair.
Unable to shed tears of pain
for her well has run dry.
Escape a distant dream as she observes
all she has ever known.
In a list
A contest entry
- Are You Bored? Well Then This is the Contest for You.. by Sweet Impatience.
1200 points, ended August 12, 2008, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Poet
Distant dreams and the darkness that engulfs that uncertain mind. It seems the older I get the more I have in common with such words. well penned poet.
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WOOOOW! All the imagery is impressive! And the picture goes so well with this poem! Well done. It's so full of emotion. I love dark poems!! Ans yours was a thorougly deserved win. Congratulations for the gold!
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Aww this was deeply emotional and really tugged at my heartstrings. You've really captured the innocence of the picture and expressed its contrast of pain held within the young girl. You truly pulled meaning from the picture and conveyed it through your words, brilliantly. This was dark yet beautiful.
Loved it hun!!!
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Very sad and powerfully written. I like "open highway of despair", gives it a feeling of how vast that anguish is! Excellent write.
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Very Powerful..sad too.. I got goosebumps while I read this.. I've read it over & over again, as I sit here.. no child or person should have to ever go through this.
the emotional pain runs deep. leaving scars..
You did an excellent job with this prompt.
good luck
kat
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wonderful take on this prompt...
you did an outstanding job with it.
best of luck to you sweet poet
Riftkin
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