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Sweet Nothings




Whirl winds of duplicity
scattered sweet petals of promises;
sowing frailty’s seed
to foster

in desperate reason
essence became obscure,
struggling to subsist

empty vines shriveled,
fallen leaves
flailed in futility

this graceful garden of dignity
withered and wept;

disintegrating within precarious soil

ash and dust slowly settled,
whispering solitude’s song of silence 

as each fertilizing incident
of pretext
revealed the true bouquet

of aroma~




Author notes

 

Option 1: Poem inspired by the very talented Perfectimperfection: Replacing Devotion

 

 http://allpoetry.com/poem/4103967

 


Well Sis, I just hope I did your brilliant piece a bit of justice
Thank you so much for the inspiration!

Jasminerose

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  • justgot2loveme
    August 28, 2008

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    I can tell already that you were born with the talent to pen. Such a precious.
    This is truly stunning, just some down right beautiful writing.

    Justgot2loveme


  • poet2angels gold member
    August 25, 2008

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    Once again, It is so difficult to express how amazing this is ..You have penned such emotion in every line and the ending, well, it is unique and written as only you can do
    Lynda


    • jasminerose
      August 26, 2008
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      Thank you so very much Lynda for the lovely award and for your beautiful words of inspiration and friendship
      It is always a pleasure to enter one of your contests and even more wonderful to have you as my bff!
      Jazzy

  • Liquid memories
    August 15, 2008

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    how rewarding to read your words as we reflect on sweet nothings of when we were in love. To have such sweetness is filled with many rewards, of pleasure, contentment and happiness. Thank you for sharing.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    August 13, 2008

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    A beautifully written piece of sadness in love's loss... I think you captured Wendy's poem wonderfully here, in your own unique style!


    • jasminerose
      August 13, 2008
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      Thank you for such a lovely comment and the smiles my friend
      Linda


  • Fug-azi
    August 13, 2008

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    Just a cos you don't need me to tell you how good you are sis.

  • poet2angels gold member
    August 12, 2008
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    WOW

    I love the metaphor used here...Just so brilliant..You are one of few people that I know who can write dark darker poems and still make them so darn beautiful
    You are proof that it is possible...This is gorgeous and the language is so poetically perfectly spoken that the words float across the page "like petals"

    The end is the clincher for me and I just love it...No one could have done this but you lol.....


    I would like to take this opportunity to thank you for being a favorite but omg what do I say to someone who has been there for me like you have ...You are like a shadow that is there even when I don't call
    just because...
    and never asking anything in return....IN poetry you are an inspiration, in contests, a co-judge lol,
    a friend, sis and a great person that I admire ...
    Thank you!!!!

    Love ya Jazzy


    Lynda

    • jasminerose
      August 13, 2008
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      Awww Thank you so very much Lynda for always giving such precious words of encouragement, kindness, friendship and love about my poetry and personally! Your friendship is the dearest to me I have ever known and I am honored that our paths met here on AP! You know I will always be there for you Sweet pea!
      Thank you for just being you! You have touched my life with your giving heart, I shall forever be thankful!
      Love ya too
      Jazzy


  • moonbumps silver member
    August 12, 2008

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    Beautiful spellbinding write as always babe-
    and blessings to you-
    Hilly xxx


    • jasminerose
      August 12, 2008
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      ss to you Hilly for the beautiful heartfelt compliment!! Thank you
      and blessings to you also
      Linda


  • Frozentearz
    August 12, 2008

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    OOh how could you not do it justice
    wonderful wonderful work.. Always a joy to have a chance to read your work. I always get lost in your wording and have to read it a few times to be sure I got it all. You made me feel both love and sorrow.
    Thanks for sharing,
    Blessings.
    Frozentearz

    • jasminerose
      August 12, 2008
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      Thank you so very much Tearz for always sharing your beautiful heart with me on my poetry! I have to share that reading your comments always bring a big smile of inspiration to my pen, more than you know!
      Thank you so much!
      Linda


  • Confusedboy
    August 11, 2008

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    lovely with ashes of whithered vines and sweet nothings. very nice. enjoyable read. Thank you for sharing.

    • jasminerose
      August 12, 2008
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      Thank you Confusedboy for the very lovely compliment on my poem! It is so wonderful to hear your thoughs on my poetry!!!
      Linda


  • poppa
    August 11, 2008

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    Beautiful write... think you did Perfects poem much justice...love the use of alliteration throughout..good luck in the contest

    • jasminerose
      August 12, 2008
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      Thank you so very much Rob for the beautiful comment on my poem! I am delighted to hear you enjoyed it so
      Linda

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