Vibrant
orange flowers
balanced on a long stem
expose filaments of stamen
attract
scurry of tiny beating wings.
Enveloped encased buds
awake sleeping
beauty.
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cinquain butterfly form 2,4,6,8,2,8,6,4,2 syllable count. Picture is taken by me of lilies next to our front step.
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I liked this, I thought you used the form really well and created some lovely images although it is also nice that you took a picture of your inspiration. I loved your ending two lines, I thought that was so gentle and lovely. This piece made me smile and it was very refreshing to read. Great Work x
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I enjoy this form alot.
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You`ve done better !
Check your
syllable count
in line three and line eight
I found five syllables each line
Cinquain
is spelled with a 'q' not a 'g'
What have you been smoking
from your garden?
Gunsha?
Gunsha: The phonetic equivalent to marijuana in the Orient.
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Thanks for pointing out the errors on my syllable counts, I have corrected them. Must be smoking the same thing you are when you try to rhyme. Haha.
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Thank you Guin I think this turned out well. Appreciate hearing from you
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Absolutely beautiful Charley!!!!! Keep on writing!!!
Love always,
Guin
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