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Exhale (Tanka)

golden ambition
liquid test of strength and mind
seen through hued glasses
breath held as fingers reach out
touching gold in a breath’s space



Author notes

Prompt: Summer Olympic Games
Picture Credit: AP Photo/Bob Bukaty
Tanka Form

A contest entry

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  • Cherrylv
    August 12, 2008

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    Great!!!

    I really like this one. I prefer reading it without the picture as it gives a much more vivid image in my mind.

    Hugs

    Cherry/Jill xxx

  • carole21
    August 12, 2008
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    nice photo and take on the prompt .. thanks for the contest entry . .


  • Lucy.
    August 11, 2008
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    Great job on the tanka...good luck in the contest.


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    August 11, 2008

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    I really love this poem.. formed poetry, you're really good at it.. me, nope sorry.. I'm not very good at counting anything thanks.. I have enough trouble counting words, letters... syllables ...hmmm I think I'll pass on that.

    I love the Olympics always have.. I really love this

    great job..

    good luck in the contest my lover


    kat